you fitted the lyrics in really well. amazingly well seriously.
The story was beautifully woven; and very nicely written. But Merryweather is right; the underlining makes it horrible to read. Or perhaps you were emphasizing those underlined words? Either way, good job. Keep writing.
Author's Response: The underlining was a requirement for the challenge it was entered in, otherwise I wouldn't have done it. It was a songfic, and we were required to include the lyrics within the text of the fic, underlining them so that they were visible and so people knew which words were not our own.
OH. MY. GAWD. I have NEVER seen anyone use Clay Aiken lyrics. I LOVE Clay. I have a $45 portrait of him in my room. And a bobblehead. And an autographed shirt. Thank you SO MUCH. Now just do a Clay songfic with Snape and you'll be my favorite author forever... *hugs*
OH. MY. GAWD. I have NEVER seen anyone use Clay Aiken lyrics. I LOVE Clay. I have a $45 portrait of him in my room. And a bobblehead. And an autographed shirt. Thank you SO MUCH. Now just do a Clay songfic with Snape and you'll be my favorite author forever... *hugs*
Please get rid of the underlining, it makes for horible reading!